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A torrent of soft wings flood
over my closed eyes,
as I see myself from the outside,
dreaming of you.

Butterflies (a million shades of white)
caress my face
and flow around me
your love.
Inspired by the image of butterflies in a friend's poem, and by my girlfriend.

Bagpipes and Butterflies
by ~mcivercork
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musical-nymph Featured By Owner May 7, 2005
This is lovely. The image of the butterflies being like rain is so very striking.

Beautiful piece.
the-figurehead Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004   Artisan Crafter
I don't know why I haven't commented on this. Probably cause I would have said this. Remember that time we all got attacked by those butterflys? They were just everywhere all of a sudden. And, reguardless of what most people say, they were BITING us.

Just thought you'd like the trip down memory lane.

But, this is a really good graphical poem, where it is so easy to feel and see what you are describing. Great imagery and telling. Simple, short, and very nicely put together.
rustkill Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004
I sure do remember those butterflys. They came swarming down from the top oval like a landslide and I definitely know they were biting! hehe.. Those were the days.
starquality Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2003
Nice one! i, its just...there and wonderful.
mcivercork Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2003   Writer
Here a very beautiful poem, that touched me! I like it - and I could read it a lot of times!

Is that the right translation of the French?
katyj Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2003
I love this poem because it is an incredibly beautiful image, more so because it is beautifully expressed. It's so soft and gentle - I feel like I have been touched by those butterflies as well!
Voici une très belle poème, qui m'a touchée! Je l'aime - et je pourrais le lire beaucoup de fois!
(not really sure why I decided to write that in French, just felt appropriate for some reason!)
Anyway, once again, a great poem Luke! :) (Smile)
mcivercork Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2003   Writer
This has given me a visual image that is incredible potent and unique. I can see it all... and that is certainly a rare quality in a poem.

'as I see myself from the outside,
dreaming of you.'

This is allround good. Simple in language, complex in image, heart-felt in emotion...

I can't help smiling, as butterflies would tickle my eyes...

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