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Beautiful piece.
Just thought you'd like the trip down memory lane.
But, this is a really good graphical poem, where it is so easy to feel and see what you are describing. Great imagery and telling. Simple, short, and very nicely put together.
(Irene)
Is that the right translation of the French?
Voici une très belle poème, qui m'a touchée! Je l'aime - et je pourrais le lire beaucoup de fois!
(not really sure why I decided to write that in French, just felt appropriate for some reason!)
Anyway, once again, a great poem Luke!
This has given me a visual image that is incredible potent and unique. I can see it all... and that is certainly a rare quality in a poem.
'as I see myself from the outside,
dreaming of you.'
This is allround good. Simple in language, complex in image, heart-felt in emotion...
I can't help smiling, as butterflies would tickle my eyes...